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Lightning
Fri Dec 13, 2013 7:21 pm by queengoogoo
In the evening when the day is done
And no more is the light from the sun,
I look upon the stars Heaven high
And find gratefulness deep inside.
But then there are nights a storm rolls in,
And the twinkles disappear above the lightning.
The thunder accompanying the flash,
Lets me embrace the rain's splash.
These strikes pealing within the darkness
Makes me feel I have been blessed.
For there is …
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And no more is the light from the sun,
I look upon the stars Heaven high
And find gratefulness deep inside.
But then there are nights a storm rolls in,
And the twinkles disappear above the lightning.
The thunder accompanying the flash,
Lets me embrace the rain's splash.
These strikes pealing within the darkness
Makes me feel I have been blessed.
For there is …
[ Full reading ]
Comments: 1
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Thu Mar 29, 2012 3:07 pm by cuthugas
Hey Everyone,
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Just wanted to see if anyone has anything to say now that you've had a chance to use the forum a bit.
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New Forum Format
Fri Jan 07, 2011 12:46 am by Admin
Hello Everyone,
This is the new format for our WVW Writing Forum. The hope is that this will better facilitate the membership's need for interaction, and will also act as a centralized location for news and information about WVW upcoming events and news. Please feel free to start a conversation, ask for advice, or just voice your opinion about a topic. Please thoroughly read our rules and …
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This is the new format for our WVW Writing Forum. The hope is that this will better facilitate the membership's need for interaction, and will also act as a centralized location for news and information about WVW upcoming events and news. Please feel free to start a conversation, ask for advice, or just voice your opinion about a topic. Please thoroughly read our rules and …
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I am West Virginia
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I am West Virginia
Thanks for indulging me.
I am looking for feedback, positive or negative, it all helps. Thank you!
I am West Virginia
I am the Kanawha, the Elk, the New River.
I am West Virginia.
I am the roaring white waters, the bubbling stream,
the winding creek.
I am West Virginia
I am Charleston, I am Chesapeake, I am Morgantown.
I am West Virginia.
I am the waitress, the bus driver, the coal miner.
I am West Virginia.
I am the Eagle guarding our Capitol, I am the Hawk gliding over Hawk’s Nest, I am the Blue Bird in the meadows of Dolly Sods.
I am West Virginia.
I am the hollows, the valleys and the mountains.
I am West Virginia.
I am tragedy and heartbreak, I am Blair Mountain, I am Matewan, I am Monongah, I am Sago.
I am West Virginia.
I am the strength, the hope and the resilience of all my people. I am proud, strong and true.
I am forever West Virginia.
- Sharon Kreiling
© December 2007
7:00pm Jun 20 |
I am West Virginia
I am the Kanawha, the Elk, the New River.
I am West Virginia.
I am the roaring white waters, the bubbling stream,
the winding creek.
I am West Virginia
I am Charleston, I am Chesapeake, I am Morgantown.
I am West Virginia.
I am the waitress, the bus driver, the coal miner.
I am West Virginia.
I am the Eagle guarding our Capitol, I am the Hawk gliding over Hawk’s Nest, I am the Blue Bird in the meadows of Dolly Sods.
I am West Virginia.
I am the hollows, the valleys and the mountains.
I am West Virginia.
I am tragedy and heartbreak, I am Blair Mountain, I am Matewan, I am Monongah, I am Sago.
I am West Virginia.
I am the strength, the hope and the resilience of all my people. I am proud, strong and true.
I am forever West Virginia.
- Sharon Kreiling
© December 2007
shaleetoo- Posts : 9
Join date : 2012-06-13
Re: I am West Virginia
Hey Sharon!
Diane Tarantini here. For what it's worth, I like your poem a lot. However, I do not have any training in poetry whatsoever. I do not know what to tell you as to whether it's "good" or "bad" as poetry goes.
Hope you get an expert opinion shortly.
Diane Tarantini here. For what it's worth, I like your poem a lot. However, I do not have any training in poetry whatsoever. I do not know what to tell you as to whether it's "good" or "bad" as poetry goes.
Hope you get an expert opinion shortly.
writingdianet- Posts : 23
Join date : 2012-02-21
Re: I am West Virginia
Thank you so much for taking the time to read it. I have gotten a few private messages and people do seem to like it. One published author said that he feels I am holding back. Not sure what to do about that.
shaleetoo- Posts : 9
Join date : 2012-06-13
Re: I am West Virginia
Hey Sharon:
Been at beach. You're welcome though I doubt I'm much help. I'm guessing the published author sensed there was more (emotion maybe?) "between the lines" that you weren't expressing. Maybe (and really, I'm a poetry idiot) WHY are you writing the poem? It feels declarative to me--are you happy (or the opposite) to announce those things? Or, do you feel like there's someone out there who NEEDS to hear them?
Oh, and bluebird should be written like this, I'm pretty sure8)
And also, in my opinion, those really long lines should be broken up a bit. Wait for confirmation on that though. You know why, right? 'Cause I'm a poetry know-nothing-at-all.
Been at beach. You're welcome though I doubt I'm much help. I'm guessing the published author sensed there was more (emotion maybe?) "between the lines" that you weren't expressing. Maybe (and really, I'm a poetry idiot) WHY are you writing the poem? It feels declarative to me--are you happy (or the opposite) to announce those things? Or, do you feel like there's someone out there who NEEDS to hear them?
Oh, and bluebird should be written like this, I'm pretty sure8)
And also, in my opinion, those really long lines should be broken up a bit. Wait for confirmation on that though. You know why, right? 'Cause I'm a poetry know-nothing-at-all.
writingdianet- Posts : 23
Join date : 2012-02-21
Re: I am West Virginia
That's it! You hit the nail on the head! I did not know why I wrote it till you asked me and then it was as clear as can be. I am so proud of West Virginia and I think people need to hear this poem. I want people to realize what a great state this is and that we are resilient, proud, strong and true! I think it is powered by my childhood. My parents were in the group that headed to Ohio for jobs. Where I went to school I was made fun of for my accent and called a stupid Hillbilly. This is my way of saying "You don't know anything about MY state!" You can't possible know how much you have helped me. and I am Happy!
shaleetoo- Posts : 9
Join date : 2012-06-13
Re: I am West Virginia
Awwww:) So glad I helped you out.
Rob Merritt, a frequent presenter at WVWriters annual conference and a college English professor, told me to always ask myself, "Why am I writing this poem?" before I get started. Of course, I haven't written a poem since he told me that, because it's not really my thing, but now this piece of advice is yours too and you can use it whenever you sit down to write a poem:)
Rob Merritt, a frequent presenter at WVWriters annual conference and a college English professor, told me to always ask myself, "Why am I writing this poem?" before I get started. Of course, I haven't written a poem since he told me that, because it's not really my thing, but now this piece of advice is yours too and you can use it whenever you sit down to write a poem:)
writingdianet- Posts : 23
Join date : 2012-02-21
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